Best of "Public Commander Keen Forum" - Narrative Keen Poems

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Zunächst der Eintrag, mit dem alles begann und dann das (bis zum 10.05.2002) entstandene Gedicht...

Eintrag von KeenEmpire

Lets make Keen Narrative Poems!
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Oh yes, I've found this idea and leeched it. It is basically a community poem that tells a Keen story. As a precaution against powerfully moving poems, there is a limit for how much you can post...aww well, that's in the rules

The Rules:

1. One line per post
2. No two subsequent posts by one person
3. If the line previous to the line previous to your post rhymes to the line previous to your line, then you can choose if you want your line to rhyme or not. If the line previous to the line previous to your line doesn't rhyme with the line previous to your line, then you have to make your line rhyme with the line previous to your post. (Where "rhyme" is the last word of the poetic line you're writing)

Das Gedicht

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On the suburbs of a city; on a far-away house,	KeenEmpire
A thorn bush like animal, bent sniffing as it walked around.	Forge315
An 8-year-old at dinnertime was starting to grouse.	adurdin
So he fled outside, and grabbed the hose;	Forge315
And sprayed that animal from head to toes.	Flaose
Then its porcupine body, changed into a white blossom.	Forge315
(Keen did not expect this, he thought it was awesome.)	Ilsoap
But the blossom was angry and keen had to be wary	Flaose
Although the snowy flower did not appear scary	adurdin
So he pulled out his pogo, quick as a flash	KeenCommander
But before he could react, the ground went SMASH!	KeenEmpire
He fell into a deep chasm	Xtraverse
Where diamonds covered the surfaces, but he descend still further....	Forge315
where the world revealed him an answer as he pondered..	MRC Marky
Suddenly Keen hit his head and went into a spasm (what a crazy thing to happen in the chasm).	Flaose
When he rose, his legs felt rickety, because standing ther over him was a Shikadi!	adurdin
He kicked the Shikadi with advanced rubber boots,	KeenEmpire
And because of the boots did not electricute his body.	Flaose
He Looked at Keen, electricity surfing high around the Shikadi’s body!	Forge315
It brough down its fist, spike protruding aside.	KeenEmpire
Keen was quick to avoid it, he jumped to the side	Xtraverse
But it wasn't finished, no chance, no way.	KeenEmpire
He knew the Shikadi, he would have to pay.	Xtraverse
Keen took off at a run, though his watch gave a beep	KeenEmpire
Tis the parent alarm, they're coming back home! eek!	MRC Marky
Now what was Keen supposed to do, With his parents round the corner, too and an angry Shikadi on the loose?	adurdin
If his parents saw it they'd have his caboose. So out the Neural Stunner he whipped	Flaose
Not noticing the shaggy root, he tripped Sprawled on the ground his gun went sailing	KeenCommander
And then towards it, his arm went flailing Be the stunner was far, he couldn't reach	Xtraverse
The Skikadi came close to teach A lesson Keen wouldn't want to preach Or learn, even at the beach! Keen rolled around, approaching the gun,	KeenEmpire
(Under the heat and under the sun) Finally! He caught it! Keen's fingers he wrapped.	Flaose
Maybe this was wacked, but the Shikadi he shot at last! Zip, zip, zoom … a big fume flew Keen upwards! "AHH!"	Forge315
-he shrieked, as he landed again, gaining quite a large scar On his forehead, in the shape of a lightning bolt	Too Much Spare Time
Then a sinister green mold, Grew and grew out of his scar. It looked like bean stalk, And it kept on growing towards the stars!	Forge315

Zusammenfassung: Uwe Schaefer 2002, Inhalt: Commander Keen Community 2002