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Best of "Public Commander Keen Forum" - Narrative Keen Poems

Das Original kann man hier finden.

Zunächst der Eintrag, mit dem alles begann und dann das (bis zum 10.05.2002) entstandene Gedicht...

Eintrag von KeenEmpire

Lets make Keen Narrative Poems!
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Oh yes, I've found this idea and leeched it. It is basically a community poem that tells a Keen story. As a precaution against powerfully moving poems, there is a limit for how much you can post...aww well, that's in the rules

The Rules:

1. One line per post
2. No two subsequent posts by one person
3. If the line previous to the line previous to your post rhymes to the line previous to your line, then you can choose if you want your line to rhyme or not. If the line previous to the line previous to your line doesn't rhyme with the line previous to your line, then you have to make your line rhyme with the line previous to your post. (Where "rhyme" is the last word of the poetic line you're writing)

Das Gedicht

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On the suburbs of a city; on a far-away house,

KeenEmpire

A thorn bush like animal, bent sniffing as it walked around.

Forge315

An 8-year-old at dinnertime was starting to grouse.

adurdin

So he fled outside, and grabbed the hose;

Forge315

And sprayed that animal from head to toes.

Flaose

Then its porcupine body, changed into a white blossom.

Forge315

(Keen did not expect this, he thought it was awesome.)

Ilsoap

But the blossom was angry and keen had to be wary

Flaose

Although the snowy flower did not appear scary

adurdin

So he pulled out his pogo, quick as a flash

KeenCommander

But before he could react, the ground went SMASH!

KeenEmpire

He fell into a deep chasm

Xtraverse

Where diamonds covered the surfaces, but he descend still further....

Forge315

where the world revealed him an answer as he pondered..

MRC Marky

Suddenly Keen hit his head and went into a spasm (what a crazy thing to happen in the chasm).

Flaose

When he rose, his legs felt rickety, because standing ther over him was a Shikadi!

adurdin

He kicked the Shikadi with advanced rubber boots,

KeenEmpire

And because of the boots did not electricute his body.

Flaose

He Looked at Keen, electricity surfing high around the Shikadi’s body!

Forge315

It brough down its fist, spike protruding aside.

KeenEmpire

Keen was quick to avoid it, he jumped to the side

Xtraverse

But it wasn't finished, no chance, no way.

KeenEmpire

He knew the Shikadi, he would have to pay.

Xtraverse

Keen took off at a run, though his watch gave a beep

KeenEmpire

Tis the parent alarm, they're coming back home! eek!

MRC Marky

Now what was Keen supposed to do,
With his parents round the corner, too
and an angry Shikadi on the loose?

adurdin

If his parents saw it they'd have his caboose.
So out the Neural Stunner he whipped

Flaose

Not noticing the shaggy root, he tripped
Sprawled on the ground his gun went sailing

KeenCommander

And then towards it, his arm went flailing
Be the stunner was far, he couldn't reach

Xtraverse

The Skikadi came close to teach
A lesson Keen wouldn't want to preach
Or learn, even at the beach!
Keen rolled around, approaching the gun,

KeenEmpire

(Under the heat and under the sun)
Finally! He caught it! Keen's fingers he wrapped.

Flaose

Maybe this was wacked, but the Shikadi he shot at last!
Zip, zip, zoom … a big fume flew Keen upwards! "AHH!"

Forge315

-he shrieked, as he landed again, gaining quite a large scar
On his forehead, in the shape of a lightning bolt

Too Much Spare Time

Then a sinister green mold,
Grew and grew out of his scar.
It looked like bean stalk,
And it kept on growing towards the stars!

Forge315

Zusammenfassung: Uwe Schaefer 2002, Inhalt: Commander Keen Community 2002

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